this is cute if mildley sueish the end makes perfect sense that the curse would carry so her bf is on the celling not her were does nov 2nd come from is that important or did u make it up
i like the thing about the monster in the closet "the look in his eyes scares her more than anything that might be lurking behind her clothes." thats really spooky i like this story alot but u have to be careful with the random relatives of main charters u do it right but it is offten a sue (sorry i read god awful fanfic to much they r overly critical)
basicaly i like the story i dont know anything about tenses but the warewolf bit is choppy although the is sammy ok thing is uber sweet
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branchandroot
so like sam is grandpa
Date: 2005-11-13 12:15 am (UTC)this is cute if mildley sueish the end makes perfect sense that the curse would carry so her bf is on the celling not her were does nov 2nd come from is that important or did u make it up
i like the thing about the monster in the closet "the look in his eyes scares her more than anything that might be lurking behind her clothes." thats really spooky i like this story alot but u have to be careful with the random relatives of main charters u do it right but it is offten a sue (sorry i read god awful fanfic to much they r overly critical)
basicaly i like the story i dont know anything about tenses but the warewolf bit is choppy although the is sammy ok thing is uber sweet
is that enough concrit lol